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Do you always care for strangers? Why or why not?

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2024-10-15 1709

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I usally care for strangers.
Because there is a light bright in front of my house .
And there is a wandering police because of an elementary school.
So I can go around when it is dark outside.
But, I care for strangers more when there is a serious crime.
It may be happen to anyone, anytime, and anywhere.
So we should always care for strangers and do not get around alone.

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Hello Nicole,
Thank you for sending your homework. It was nice reading your opinion about the topic matter. 
Always make sure to use proper spelling and punctuation in your compositions. Have a nice day!
~ T. Demi ^^

I usally care for strangers.
>> I usually care for strangers.
Because there is a light bright in front of my house. And there is a wandering police because of an elementary school. So I can go around when it is dark outside.
>>Since there is a bright light in front of my house, and the police are patrolling near an elementary school, I feel safe going out even when it's dark outside.
But, I care for strangers more when there is a serious crime.
>> However, I am more concerned about strangers when there is a serious crime.
It may be happen to anyone, anytime, and anywhere.
>> Because it may happen to anyone, anytime, and anywhere.
So we should always care for strangers and do not get around alone.
>> So, we should always care for strangers and not go out alone.
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