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I think that relaxing is very important. So God give us the weekend. We can't continue to work. If we don't have relaxing, we can't make good results. I know someone, he work hard every days, he never had relaxing time, he eventually god a bed disease. He spend a lot of time and money for curing disease. He changed his mind after recover from the disease. He started to enjoy relaxing. Now he very healthy and seems likes happy. I think to relax is to start for a work.

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Hi Eva!

You made some great points about how important it is to take breaks and recharge. It¡¯s a good reminder that working non-stop can lead to burnout, just like the story you shared about someone who learned the hard way. I¡¯m glad to hear he found a better balance and is now healthy and happy. Remember, taking time to relax isn¡¯t just a luxury; it¡¯s necessary for doing our best work. Keep up the good work, and don¡¯t forget to take some time for yourself!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think that relaxing is very important.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe that relaxing is very important.

So God give us the weekend.

>>So God gave us the weekend.

We can't continue to work.

>>CORRECT

OR>>We can't keep working.

If we don't have relaxing, we can't make good results.

>>If we don't relax, we can't achieve good results.

I know someone, he work hard every days, he never had relaxing time, he eventually god a bed disease.

>>I know someone who works hard every day. He never had time to relax, and he eventually got a bad disease.

He spend a lot of time and money for curing disease.

>>He spent a lot of time and money on curing his disease.

He changed his mind after recover from the disease.

>>He changed his mind after recovering from the disease.

He started to enjoy relaxing.

>>CORRECT

OR>>He began to enjoy relaxing.

Now he very healthy and seems likes happy.

>>Now he is very healthy and he seems happy.

I think to relax is to start for a work.

>>I think that relaxing is the starting point for work.

 

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