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ESSAY (Please write a short essay to answer the question.)
> Where do you prefer staying while on vacation?

Answer
Vacation is everything,everywhere good. Among I like take a rest at hotel or resort than city tour because I can enjoy the everythings inside facilities(Gym,Restaurant,pool, etc.)
I happy just thinking a vacation. If I can go to vacation right now, I will go to abroad like cebu.
I have been to the cebu twice, I has a many good memorise about cebu.
I want swim at 'Jpark resort' everyday and  don't contact the company.

When I visited cebu a few years ago my husband received many office calld  so his did not enjoy vacation. Therfore never  any contact in the office. So that we can fully enjoy our vacation !

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Thank you for this Nala. I agree, vacation should only be spent relaxing and having a leisure time. There's no room for any work related things during vacation.

Vacation is everything, everywhere good. 
>>>  Vacation is everything, and everywhere is good. 
Among I like take a rest at hotel or resort than city tour because I can enjoy the everythings inside facilities(Gym,Restaurant,pool, etc.)
>>>  Among those, I like taking a rest at a hotel or resort than city tour because I can enjoy all the indoor facilities (gym, restaurants, pool, etc.)
I happy just thinking a vacation. 
>>>  I'm happy just thinking of having a vacation.
>>> OR: Just the thought of vacation makes me happy.
If I can go to vacation right now, I will go to abroad like cebu.
>>> If I can go on a vacation right now, I will go abroad like in Cebu.
I have been to the cebu twice, I has a many good memorise about cebu.
>>>  I have been to the Cebu twice and I have many good memories of Cebu.
I want swim at 'Jpark resort' everyday and  don't contact the company.
>>>  I want to swim at 'Jpark resort' everyday and not be contacted by the company.
When I visited cebu a few years ago my husband received many office call so his did not enjoy vacation. 
>>>  When I visited Cebu a few years ago, my husband received many office related calls so he did not enjoy his vacation. 
Therfore never any contact in the office. So that we can fully enjoy our vacation !
>>>  Therefore, never make any contact with the office so that we can fully enjoy our vacation!
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