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1. What are the benefits of collecting?
A) Collectors have the potential to become an expert in one area.
And sometimes after a while, the value of the collected items rises and benefits economically.
But above all, it seems to be self-satisfaction.

2. What are the similarities/differences between collectors and hoarding?
A) Both of them have something in common that they collect something.
However, the collector's motives are pure, but hoarding is not.
As a result, collectors do not harm others, but hoarders damages others.

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Hi, David.

Thank you for answering the questions well. It was so interesting to meet a collector in you. I honestly did not expect that you'll have time to collect certain things because of your schedule and responsibilities. However, the idea of you collecting money or coins was intriguing. Good job constructing sentences well.

Regards,
Teacher Dana


A) Collectors have the potential to become an expert in one area.

>>>CORRECT


And sometimes after a while, the value of the collected items rises and benefits economically.

>>>Sometimes, over time, the value of collected items increases, providing economic benefits.


But above all, it seems to be self-satisfaction.

>>>Above all, it appears to bring personal satisfaction.


A) Both of them have something in common that they collect something.

>>>Both collectors and hoarders have in common that they gather or accumulate items.


However, the collector's motives are pure, but hoarding is not.

>>>However, collectors usually have a purposeful or pure motive, while hoarding tends to lack this.


As a result, collectors do not harm others, but hoarders damages others.

>>>As a result, collectors typically do not harm others, while hoarders can cause harm to themselves or others.

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