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Writing task: When was the last time you felt proud of yourself?

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I think maybe I was bought my house. although I had somebody's debt.
I remember the moment when I signed to contract.
My husband and I had a hard time getting start because we have not enough money. I didn't thinked of buying house.

The time was maybe it turned 30. Among my sisters and friends, this is the first thing I do. I'm really happy and proud.

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Hello, Ms. Nala! If I were you, I'd be proud of myself, too. I guess it's true when people say: Do it scared. Do it anyway. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
I think maybe I was bought my house. 
>>I think, it might be the time when I bought my house.
although I had somebody's debt.
>>Although, I was in debt at that time.
I remember the moment when I signed to contract.
>>I remember the moment when I signed the contract.
My husband and I had a hard time getting start because we have not enough money. 
>>My husband and I had a hard time starting because we didn't have enough money.
I didn't thinked of buying house.
>>I have never thought of buying a house.
The time was maybe it turned 30. 
>>Not until, I think, when I turned 30.
Among my sisters and friends, this is the first thing I do. 
>>Among my sisters and friends, I was the first one who had done it.
I'm really happy and proud.
>>I am ecstatic and proud.

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