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Why do you think some people enjoy breaking rules while others follow them strictly?

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It's because some peoples wants to break rules if someone says to follow rules and if someone says nothing about rules than people might follow rules.
Somepeople might follow rules strictly because that person didn't wanted to follow the rules.

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Hi Sunny!
Thank you for expressing yourself more.
I know you can improve a lot.
Just keep working hard.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
It's because some peoples wants to break rules if someone says to follow rules and if someone says nothing about rules than people might follow rules.
>> It's because some people want to break rules if someone says to follow them and if someone says nothing about rules, then people might follow them.
Somepeople might follow rules strictly because that person didn't wanted to follow the rules.
>> Some people might follow rules strictly because they want to do it.
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