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I think medical insurance system is wrong in my country.
Include in private insurances can cover the all of medical bills.
Some doctor suggest methods like hospitalization to ask for all of fee of it.
If people are sick It is easy for them to go hospital by free .
We only have to pay for plastic surgery bills.
Many people don't cut down the money for their beauty
Although the prices is high.

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Ms. Sunny!
I'm getting more impressed with you for making long sentences now. Aren't you proud of yourself?
Well, thank you for trying to express your thoughts well, and try to observe those tiny corrections that I made to make your sentences correct. Great job!
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I think medical insurance system is wrong in my country.
>>> I think the medical insurance system is wrong in my country.

Include in private insurances can cover the all of medical bills.
>>> Including private insurance can cover the all of medical bills.

Some doctor suggest methods like hospitalization to ask for all of fee of it.
>>> Some doctors suggest methods like hospitalization to ask for all of the fees of it.

If people are sick It is easy for them to go hospital by free .
>>> If people are sick It is easy for them to go hospital for free

We only have to pay for plastic surgery bills.
>> CORRECT!

Many people don't cut down the money for their beauty.
>> CORRECT!

Although the prices is high.
>>> Although the prices are high.

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