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Q: What makes gadgets frustrating?
A: I think the battery limits make gadgets frustrating.
Usually, for other objects that people use, they don't need battery, so they can use them without any worries.
On the other hand, for gadgets, they require batteries to fuction, so people should always consider about the batteries.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some considerations:

1. I think the battery limits make gadgets frustrating.
>>CORRECT!

2. Usually, for other objects that people use, they don't need battery, so they can use them without any worries.
>>Usually, other objects that people use don't need battery, so they can use them without worries.

3. On the other hand, for gadgets, they require batteries to fuction, so people should always consider about the batteries.
>>On the other hand, gadgets require batteries to function, so people should always consider the batteries.

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