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How do you think your research findings could impact breast cancer treatment in the future?

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Breast cancer in men is very rare. So, there are few research in this topic among Asian patients.
So, my international collaboration research with colleagues from Japan and Australia could impact on the further information about male breast cancer.
This research has a focus on the adherence of treatment such as endocrine therapy.
Moreover, there is significant difference on the long-term prognosis between male and female patients.
My research could give valuable insight on this disparity among the clinical outcome.
I hope to bring home the bacon to make additional evidence through my researches in the future.

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Hello!

Great job on your homework. You've shared some fascinating details about your research on male breast cancer, especially in collaboration with colleagues from Japan and Australia. It's inspiring to see how your work could add valuable insights to this rare field, particularly around treatment adherence and clinical outcomes. Keep up the great work, and I¡¯m looking forward to seeing your progress in this important research!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Breast cancer in men is very rare.

>>CORRECT

OR>>It's not common for men to have breast cancer.

So, there are few research in this topic among Asian patients.

>>So, there is little research on this topic among Asian patients.

So, my international collaboration research with colleagues from Japan and Australia could impact on the further information about male breast cancer.

>>So, my international collaborative research with colleagues from Japan and Australia could impact the further understanding of male breast cancer.

This research has a focus on the adherence of treatment such as endocrine therapy.

>>This research focuses on treatment adherence, such as with endocrine therapy.

Moreover, there is significant difference on the long-term prognosis between male and female patients.

>>Moreover, there is a significant difference in the long-term prognosis between male and female patients.

My research could give valuable insight on this disparity among the clinical outcome.

>>My research could provide valuable insight into this disparity in clinical outcomes.

I hope to bring home the bacon to make additional evidence through my researches in the future.

>>I hope to bring home valuable findings to contribute additional evidence through my research in the future.

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