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I think most people give up too easily when something comes difficult. But people who succeed have patience and willpower to enjoy difficult things and challenging. So nowadays I also challenge hard things and try to enjoy that. And it would work.

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Hi, Ji Yun. It's great to hear from you again! ^^ You're forming clear and coherent sentences, which is a great foundation. Setting aside time to do your homework each week is improving your ability to organize and express your ideas. You're on the right track now. See you in class. ~Jane :) 


I think most people give up too easily when something comes difficult. 
>> I think most people give up too easily when something difficult comes along. 

But people who succeed have patience and willpower to enjoy difficult things and challenging. 
>> But people who succeed have the patience and willpower to overcome difficult things and challenges. 

So nowadays I also challenge hard things and try to enjoy that. And it would work.
>> So nowadays I'm also faced with challenges and hard things but I try to enjoy that and it works. 
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