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Homework Title :
What's the most memorable vacation you're had

This is a answer :
I had most memorable vacation is when I go to the OSAKA in Japan with my son
We were stay in hotel of five star, It's very easy. Also we eat many favorite food Sashimi, fish Kimbab and steak.
Breakfast is eat in hotel restaurant. and we have show around OSAKA city.
And we was in OSAKA show night around two evening, and back home, thank you.

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Hi, Han Yong! I'm glad that you enjoyed Osaka. It's one of my dream places to go as well. I want to see the Osaka castle. and eat authentic okonomiyaki. Thank you for these wonderful sentences. See you!
--Teacher Anji

This is a answer :
>> This is my answer:
I had most memorable vacation is when I go to the OSAKA in Japan with my son.
>> My most memorable vacation was when I went to Osaka, Japan with my son.
We were stay in hotel of five star, 
>> We stayed in a 5-star hotel.
It's very easy. 
>> CORRECT
Also we eat many favorite food Sashimi, fish Kimbab and steak.
>> We also ate our favorite food such as sashimi, fish kimbap, and steak.
Breakfast is eat in hotel restaurant.
>> We ate breakfast at the hotel restaurant.
 and we have show around OSAKA city.
>> And we went sightseeing around Osaka.
And we was in OSAKA show night around two evening, and back home, thank you.
>> We were in Osaka night show for about 2 nights, then we went back home. Thank you.
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