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What do you think of celebrity endorsements?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-11-04 1819

회원님의 영작문

Well, do you mean sponsoring a celebrity or a celebrity sponsoring me or someone else?
First of all, I'm in favor of sponsoring celebrities and I think it's individual freedom.
However, there is no problem in sponsoring according to your financial situation, but it doesn't seem to be good to sponsor excessively beyond your financial situation.
Also, sponsoring may be a means of competition, so I think it's right to do it within a reasonable range.
Secondly, I think it would be good for a celebrity to sponsor me or someone else.
This is because it will be a motivation and passion to move forward as much as celebrities support them.
However, as it is known that celebrities have sponsored it, there may be no personal privacy or someone may be bullied as an object of jealousy.
Also, you will be under severe stress from the pressure to produce good results and there will be a lot of a feeling of burden.
In addition, you may have to hide your nature because you have to show like good people.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun~
I would like to know what you think about celebrities being used to launch or advertise a product. In my opinion, it works really well, especially when an enterprise hires well-known K-pop artists, as many people support them by purchasing their products.  Nevertheless, I appreciate your composition today. ^_^ 
Chammy
Well, do you mean sponsoring a celebrity or a celebrity sponsoring me or someone else?
OR
>> Do you imply that I or someone else is being sponsored by a celebrity, or vice versa?
First of all, I'm in favor of sponsoring celebrities and I think it's individual freedom.
Or
>> First of all, I believe that it is an individual's right to sponsor celebrities.
However, there is no problem in sponsoring according to your financial situation, but it doesn't seem to be good to sponsor excessively beyond your financial situation.
OR
 Although there is nothing wrong with sponsoring in line with what you can afford, it doesn't seem wise to sponsor in excess of your means.
Also, sponsoring may be a means of competition, so I think it's right to do it within a reasonable range.
Or
>>Sponsoring can also be a way to compete, so I think it's appropriate to do so within a suitable range.
Secondly, I think it would be good for a celebrity to sponsor me or someone else. This is because it will be a motivation and passion to move forward as much as celebrities support them. However, as it is known that celebrities have sponsored it, there may be no personal privacy or someone may be bullied as an object of jealousy.
>> Correct 
Also, you will be under severe stress from the pressure to produce good results and there will be a lot of a feeling of burden.
Or
>>Additionally, you will feel a great deal of pressure and be under a lot of stress due to the expectation to do well.
In addition, you may have to hide your nature because you have to show like good people.
>> In addition, you may have to hide your nature because you have to show good people.
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