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Can excessive use of social media have the opposite effect on health?

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2024-11-06 1920

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I think yes it can, especially to psychological side.
As individuals usually come to close with others news, many of them have no choice but to compare them to others.
If someone is feeling depression with their situation, the more good news they see/hear, the more desperate they could be.
Besides, social media tends to make people be addicted to it, so it could contributes to people's late sleep or problems to concentration on real life.

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Hey, Ms. Anna! Great insight! You¡¯ve made some strong points about the psychological effects of social media, especially how it can lead to comparisons and impact mental well-being. I like how you also mentioned the addictive nature of social media and its effect on sleep and focus.
~T. Jenna

I think yes it can, especially to psychological side.
Correct, or
>>Yes, I believe so, especially when it comes to the psychological impact.
As individuals usually come to close with others news, many of them have no choice but to compare them to others.
>>As individuals are often exposed to others' news, many of them have no choice but to compare themselves to others.
OR
>>As individuals usually come across others' news, many of them have no choice but to compare themselves to others.
If someone is feeling depression with their situation, the more good news they see/hear, the more desperate they could be.
>>If someone is feeling depressed about their situation, the more good news they see or hear, the more desperate they may become.
OR
>>If someone is struggling with their situation, being constantly bombarded with good news can make them feel even more disheartened.
Besides, social media tends to make people be addicted to it, so it could contributes to people's late sleep or problems to concentration on real life.
>>Besides, social media tends to make people addicted to it, which could contribute to late sleep and difficulties concentrating in real life.
OR
>>Moreover, social media has a tendency to foster addiction, which can lead to disrupted sleep and hinder one¡¯s ability to focus on real-life matters.
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