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How can mistakes help us learn and grow?

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2024-11-08 2018

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I often make a mistakes. I did a lot of mistakes on my life. We always say 'no pain no gain'. It seems like this pain is mistakes. If I made a mistake, l wiill never make the same mistake. So I can learn through mistakes. I think that there is no perfect person. So we can make a mistakes, this isn't bed. But sometimes I made a funny mistakes, it get a laugh. This situation can include vitamin. Don't be afraid make mistakes.

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Hello Eva,

Thank you for your homework! I really like how you explained how mistakes help us learn and grow. You did a great job showing that mistakes are part of life and can teach us valuable lessons. I also love how you mentioned that mistakes can bring laughter and joy, which is a wonderful way to look at it!

Keep up the great work, and don't be afraid to make mistakes. They are an important part of your learning journey, and you're doing an amazing job!

~Teacher Cathy

               

I often make a mistakes.

>>I often make mistakes.

I did a lot of mistakes on my life.

>>I've made a lot of mistakes in my life.

We always say 'no pain no gain'.

>>CORRECT

OR>>We often say, ¡°no pain, no gain¡±.

It seems like this pain is mistakes.

>>It seems like, in this case, the pain is the mistake.

If I made a mistake, l wiill never make the same mistake.

>>If I make a mistake, I will never make the same mistake again.

So I can learn through mistakes.

>>So I can learn from my mistakes.

I think that there is no perfect person.

>>CORRECT

OR>>There's no such thing as a perfect person.

So we can make a mistakes, this isn't bed.

>>So we can make mistakes, it isn't bad.

But sometimes I made a funny mistakes, it get a laugh.

>>But sometimes I make funny mistakes, and I get a laugh.

This situation can include vitamin.

>>This situation can include a mix-up with vitamins.

Don't be afraid make mistakes.

>>Don't be afraid to make mistakes.

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