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What have you lost while traveling?

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회원님의 영작문

When I was young, our family want traveling to Japan and that time, we had lost cosmetics that we bought at the duty free shop in an airport. It was a first time that we went to the luxury cosmetic shop, Dior. My mom paid for some lipsticks. However when we walked around the airport lobby, we figured out that the shopping bag was dissappear. We didn't know when we lost, maybe we dropped or someone took it because we didn't hold it. We just put it on the cart. It was a bad experience but we learned that we should hold something important.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Lin! Thank you for sharing your experience! It sounds like it was a difficult situation, especially since you lost something you had just purchased. It’s good that you were able to learn from it. Holding onto important items, especially in busy places like airports, is definitely a valuable lesson. I hope that in the future, you'll be more cautious about keeping track of your belongings. It also sounds like you’ve become more aware of how to handle similar situations. Keep up the great work in sharing your experiences.
~T. Jenna

When I was young, our family want traveling to Japan and that time, we had lost cosmetics that we bought at the duty free shop in an airport. 
>>When I was young, our family traveled to Japan, and at that time, we lost the cosmetics we had bought at the duty-free shop in the airport.
OR
>>When I was young, my family took a trip to Japan, and during that time, we misplaced the cosmetics we had purchased at the duty-free shop in the airport.
It was a first time that we went to the luxury cosmetic shop, Dior. 
>>It was the first time we went to the luxury cosmetic shop, Dior.
My mom paid for some lipsticks. 
Correct, or
>>My mother made a purchase of several lipsticks.
However when we walked around the airport lobby, we figured out that the shopping bag was dissappear. 
>>However, when we walked around the airport lobby, we realized that the shopping bag had disappeared.
OR
>>However, as we wandered through the airport lobby, we discovered that the shopping bag had vanished.
We didn't know when we lost, maybe we dropped or someone took it because we didn't hold it. 
>>We didn't know when we lost it; maybe we dropped it or someone took it because we hadn't been holding it.
OR
>>We didn’t know when we lost it; it could have slipped through our fingers, or someone might have taken it since we weren’t keeping a close eye on it.
We just put it on the cart. 
Correct, or
>>We simply placed it in the cart without giving it much thought.
It was a bad experience but we learned that we should hold something important.
>>It was a bad experience, but we learned that we should always keep hold of important items.
OR
>>It was an unfortunate experience, but it taught us the valuable lesson of always safeguarding important items.
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