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How does sharing a story bring people together?

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If I share a fun story then one people will read and then that person will tell friends and then that story will be one lots of peoples algorithm.
So one people read then that brings people together.

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Hi Sunny!
You concentrated on the digital meaning of a story.
This is fine.
You were able to support your idea well.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
If I share a fun story then one people will read and then that person will tell friends and then that story will be one lots of peoples algorithm.
>> If I share a fun story to one person, he or she will read it and then that person will tell friends and then that story will be on lots of people's algorithm.
So one people read then that brings people together.
>> This is what would bring people together. 
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