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What makes a particular song or artist special to you?

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Recently and unexpectedly I watched a music video produced by G-Dragon. At first I was very astounded by his creative performance and lyrics. I was then after started to search about him from You Tube and began to admire his accomplishments and talents. Though he is younger than I am, he has a lot of things to be respected in terms of personality and characteristics.

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Hello Paul,

Thank you for submitting your homework. I was impressed with your thoughtful reflection on G-Dragon's creativity and talent. Your ability to connect with his music and admire his accomplishments, despite the age difference, shows a deep appreciation for his artistry and personality. It¡¯s clear that you value not only the work itself but also the qualities that make an artist truly remarkable. Well done, and I look forward to seeing more of your insightful reflections in the future.

~Teacher Cathy

 

Recently and unexpectedly I watched a music video produced by G-Dragon.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Out of the blue, I recently came across a music video produced by G-Dragon.

At first I was very astounded by his creative performance and lyrics.

>>At first, I was very astounded by his creative performance and lyrics.

I was then after started to search about him from You Tube and began to admire his accomplishments and talents.

>>After that, I started searching for him on YouTube and began to admire his accomplishments and talents.

Though he is younger than I am, he has a lot of things to be respected in terms of personality and characteristics.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Although he is younger than I am, he has many qualities that I respect in terms of personality and character.

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