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Q) Please write about the topic, "The Importance of Kindness as a Personality Trait.¡°

A) Kindness is important for everyone, even if we don't consider personality traits.
The question of how much kindness should be expressed is really difficult.
The other person may misunderstand because of too much kindness.
And if we continue to give the kindness to the other person, the other person may think of it as a right to be granted later.
This can happen especially when we express the kindness with money.
However, it would be better to show kindness in words to an introvert, and to an extrovert, it would be more necessary to show kindness in action.
However, this is only the basis of my judgment and not absolute.

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Hi David! Your thoughts on kindness are truly meaningful, and I can see the care you¡¯ve put into expressing them. I made a couple of small corrections, but overall, your message was heartfelt and impactful. Keep sharing your beautiful ideas with the world; it makes a difference! 


~ Teacher Lia



Kindness is important for everyone, even if we don't consider personality traits.
>> CORRECT

The question of how much kindness should be expressed is really difficult.
>> CORRECT

The other person may misunderstand because of too much kindness.
>> CORRECT

And if we continue to give the kindness to the other person, the other person may think of it as a right to be granted later.
>> And if we continue to give kindness to the other person, they may think of it as a right to be granted later.

This can happen especially when we express the kindness with money.
>> This can happen especially when we express kindness with money.

However, it would be better to show kindness in words to an introvert, and to an extrovert, it would be more necessary to show kindness in action.
>> CORRECT

However, this is only the basis of my judgment and not absolute.
>> CORRECT
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