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The effect of brave on my life

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P--During the my whole life, I always choice the decision that I want to do.
My parents taught me the brave decision when I can't decide the better thing.

R-- If I weren't choice, maybe I regret that moment, and I will have little faith to me.

E- Before 5~6 ago, I was just office worker in chemical company, My senior manager recommend preparing the official exam. I consider the possibility with my parents, and they said that we always respect your opinion, and support you. So I study and exam for 3 years, even though I can't succeed the exam, but I didn't regret to my decision.

So I think that how to live with brave decision is don't regret the moment that every I decide.

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Hello Gloria,

Your reflection shows how bravery has played an essential role in shaping your life decisions. It's inspiring how your parents supported and encouraged you to make brave choices, even during uncertain times. The example of preparing for the official exam demonstrates your determination and willingness to face challenges, even if success wasn't guaranteed. What stands out is your positive mindset. You focused on growth and avoided regret, which is a powerful way to live. Your story is a great reminder that bravery isn't just about achieving results but about taking action and trusting yourself. You're doing amazing, and your resilience is something to be proud of!

~Teacher Cathy

 

P--During the my whole life, I always choice the decision that I want to do.

>>During my whole life, I have always chosen the decision that I want to do.

My parents taught me the brave decision when I can't decide the better thing.

>>My parents taught me to make brave decisions when I can't decide the better thing.

R-- If I weren't choice, maybe I regret that moment, and I will have little faith to me.

>>If I hadn't chosen, maybe I would have regretted that moment, and I would have had little faith in myself.

E- Before 5~6 ago, I was just office worker in chemical company, My senior manager recommend preparing the official exam.

>>About 5 or 6 years ago, I was just an office worker in a chemical company. My senior manager recommended preparing for the official exam.

I consider the possibility with my parents, and they said that we always respect your opinion, and support you.

>>I considered the possibility with my parents, and they said that they would always respect my opinion and support me.

So I study and exam for 3 years, even though I can't succeed the exam, but I didn't regret to my decision.

>>So I studied for 3 years and took the exam. Even though I didn't succeed, I didn't regret my decision.

So I think that how to live with brave decision is don't regret the moment that every I decide.

>>So I think that to live with brave decisions is to not regret the moments that I decide.

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