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What room in your house or apartment do you prefer most?
I love my room because I can see a beautiful scenery. There is a beautiful park called Hanbat Botanical Garden, so I can enjoy many beautiful things. In spring, I can see cherry blossoms and other beautiful flowers and in fall, I can enjoy colorful/autumn leaves. As you can guess, how beautiful it is!  

Which region of your country do you live in?
I have been living in Dajeon, which is located in the middle of South Korea. Daejeon is very famous for a beautiful park called Hanbat Botanical Garden, so I can enjoy many beautiful things. In spring, I can see cherry blossoms and other beautiful flowers and in fall, I can enjoy colorful/autumn leaves. As you can guess, how beautiful it is!  

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What room in your house or apartment do you prefer most?
>>>I love my room because it has a beautiful view. I can see the Hanbat Botanical Garden, where I enjoy the cherry blossoms and flowers in spring, and the colorful autumn leaves in fall. It's truly stunning!


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