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Write about how you cope with your fears.

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2024-12-06 1350

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There are fears that you can work hard to get rid of and there are fears that cannot be removed no matter how hard I try.
In case of fear of height, it does not disappear no matter how hard you try.
In my case, I tried to adapt.
As I adjusted from a short height, I tried to know how high I could actually endure.
It can be reduced to some extent, but there is absolutely no solution.
However, almost all fears encountered in life can be eliminated.
First, we must understand the nature of fear.
Many people are afraid of the unsettling future to come.
I've had the same experience a lot.
But almost all of the fears I met never occurred.
And actually the fear that will arise in the future wasn't actually a fear that could be prevented no matter how hard I tried.
In the end, it doesn't change even if I care about fear.
If I meet fear, my solution is to work hard on what I have to do today.
That is the way to overcome fear and prepare for the future.

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Hi David, I just finished reading your essay about fear, and I really enjoyed it. Your insights about how fear can be both manageable and persistent were thought-provoking. I especially liked how you shared your personal experiences, like trying to adapt and face your fear of heights. It made the essay relatable and inspiring. Great job!

~ T. Lia

There are fears that you can work hard to get rid of and there are fears that cannot be removed no matter how hard I try.
>> There are fears you can work hard to overcome, and there are fears that cannot be eliminated no matter how hard I try.

In case of fear of height, it does not disappear no matter how hard you try.
>> In the case of a fear of heights, it does not disappear no matter how hard you try.

In my case, I tried to adapt.
>> CORRECT

As I adjusted from a short height, I tried to know how high I could actually endure.
>>As I adjusted to greater heights, I tried to determine how high I could actually endure.

It can be reduced to some extent, but there is absolutely no solution.
>> It can be reduced to some extent, but there is no absolute solution.

However, almost all fears encountered in life can be eliminated.
>> CORRECT

First, we must understand the nature of fear.
>> CORRECT

Many people are afraid of the unsettling future to come.
>> Many people are afraid of the uncertain future.

I've had the same experience a lot.
>> I¡¯ve had similar experiences many times.

But almost all of the fears I met never occurred.
>> But almost all of the fears I imagined never came true.

And actually the fear that will arise in the future wasn't actually a fear that could be prevented no matter how hard I tried.
>> And the fear I anticipated for the future wasn¡¯t something that could be prevented, no matter how hard I tried.

In the end, it doesn't change even if I care about fear.
>> In the end, nothing changes even if I dwell on my fears.

If I meet fear, my solution is to work hard on what I have to do today.
>> When I face fear, my solution is to focus on working hard on what I need to do today.

That is the way to overcome fear and prepare for the future.
>> CORRECT

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