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Are there any famous roads or streets in your country?
Do you think the roads in your city need improvement?
What is the condition of the roads in your city like?
How do people cross the road in the city where you live?
Are the roads and streets in the area where you live busy?
Yes, there are famous streets like those in Seoul¡¯s Gangnam district. Roads in my city could be improved, particularly during rush hour, as traffic can be heavy. People generally cross at pedestrian crossings, and the area near my house is calm but gets busy during peak hours.

Did you use coins as a child?
Do you use coins in your daily life?
Is it convenient to use coins?
Have you ever collected coins?
Do you often carry coins with you?
I used coins as a child for small purchases. I still carry coins sometimes, but I prefer using cards or mobile payments. While coins are convenient for small purchases, I no longer collect them.

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Thank you for entrusting me to simplify your answers Young In. I hope you'll be able to remember all these responses. Good luck! 

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Are there any famous roads or streets in your country?
Do you think the roads in your city need improvement?
What is the condition of the roads in your city like?
How do people cross the road in the city where you live?
Are the roads and streets in the area where you live busy?
>>>Yes, there are famous streets like those in Seoul's Gangnam district. Roads in my city could be better, especially during rush hour when traffic is heavy. People usually cross at pedestrian crossings, and the area near my house is quiet but gets busy at peak times.


Did you use coins as a child?

Do you use coins in your daily life?
Is it convenient to use coins?
Have you ever collected coins?
Do you often carry coins with you?
>>> I used coins as a child for small purchases. I still carry coins sometimes, but I prefer cards or mobile payments. I don't collect coins anymore.

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