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Do you think celebrities should take a stand on political or social issues?

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I think that celebrities should not take a stand on political and social issues. Celebrities can have strong effect on people. Sometimes a lot of people follow a their celebrity. We can see celebrity in the TV or YouTube. We think that they are very smart and winner. If I did like them, I feel like succeed. If they make a choice, l will do it. People have one's thoughts, but it is become problem to follow celebrities thoughts. Celebrities should take care of one's actions.

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Hello Eva,

You did a great job with this homework! I can see you really thought about the impact celebrities can have on others, which is an important point. You¡¯re right that celebrities have a lot of influence and that people might follow their opinions because they admire them. Your idea that celebrities should be careful with their actions is clear and thoughtful. It's great that you're considering the consequences of their influence. Keep up the good work, you¡¯re making great progress in expressing your ideas! Just remember, the more you practice, the easier it will become to express your thoughts in English. Keep going!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think that celebrities should not take a stand on political and social issues.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe celebrities should refrain from taking a stance on political and social issues.

Celebrities can have strong effect on people.

>>Celebrities can have a strong effect on people.

Sometimes a lot of people follow a their celebrity.

>>Sometimes, many people follow their celebrity.

We can see celebrity in the TV or YouTube.

>>We can see celebrities on TV or YouTube.

We think that they are very smart and winner.

>>We think that they are very smart and successful.

If I did like them, I feel like succeed. If they make a choice, l will do it.

>>If I liked them, I would feel successful. If they made a choice, I would follow it.

People have one's thoughts, but it is become problem to follow celebrities thoughts.

>>People have their own thoughts, but it becomes a problem when they follow celebrities' opinions.

Celebrities should take care of one's actions.

>>Celebrities should take care of their actions.

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