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2024-12-10 1883

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There are people who make money from foraging life.
Their representative things are natural mushrooms, ginseng and arrow roots. Some times they killed wild animals illegally.
Because their behaviors are their main souses of income.
They know a lot of knowledge about foraging things.
They can distinguish which thing can eat or not.
I think foraging can be their hobby or job.

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Hello Ms. Sunny!
I am glad that you understand the homework today. It sounds exciting to forage food however, if it becomes for a living, I understand the difficulty of it. I saw a video of this and it does look fun but in reality, people who do this every day are wishing and going for a better way of life.
See you!
Aki~


There are people who make money from foraging life.
>>> There are people who make money from foraging.
>>> Some people make money from foraging.

Their representative things are natural mushrooms, ginseng and arrow roots. 
>>> Their representative things are natural mushrooms, ginseng, and arrowroots. 

Some times they killed wild animals illegally.
>>> Sometimes they kill wild animals illegally.

Because their behaviors are their main souses of income.
>>> Because these activities are their main sources of income.

They know a lot of knowledge about foraging things.
>>> They have a lot of knowledge about foraging.

They can distinguish which thing can eat or not.
>>>  They can distinguish which can be eaten or not.
>>> They can distinguish which is edible or not.

I think foraging can be their hobby or job.
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