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Hi Teacher Divina,
Happy Tuesday ,
When our class ,Teacher , Can you say it one more time please?
The question is What are families like in Philippines
Thank you for giving me homework.
Homework.
How do you want your family to be like in the Korea?
My answer.
I would like to be happy family and be not ingnored family to someone
And then I'd like to spend many time with my future family.

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Hi, Jae Hyeon!

Thank you for doing your homework!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes:

1. I would like to be happy family and be not ingnored family to someone
>>I would like to have a happy family that do not ignore anyone.

2. And then I'd like to spend many time with my future family.
>>I'd also like to spend much time with my future family.


Side note: 
Families in the Philippines are very religious. They like going to church together. It is also common to eat and do fun things together as a family.
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