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\"How Meeting with Church Members Strengthens Bonds“

작성자: 노*철
2024-12-12 1621

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The meeting with church members starts with a meeting where they share their faith in Jesus.
However, each member's beliefs are different.
All I have to do to strengthen the bond is make my time for them whenever they need me.
Sometimes things they don't want to let others know, such as marital quarrels, happen that I have to mediate.
The important thing in that case is not to communicate their doing to others.
We have to be another family figure.
We don't talk about family shaming to others and make them go through trouble.
Giving their needs, such as giving my time and sometimes helping with materials or introducing friends for human relationships, is only possible with a family's heart.
If we treat each other like family in this way, the bond will be stronger.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi David, I just wanted to say how much I enjoyed your responses on the topic of establishing relationships with church members through simple meetings. Your thoughts were insightful and really resonated with me. Thanks for sharing!

~ T. Lia

The meeting with church members starts with a meeting where they share their faith in Jesus.
>> The meeting with church members begins with them sharing their faith in Jesus.


However, each member's beliefs are different.
>> CORRECT


All I have to do to strengthen the bond is make time for them whenever they need me.
>> CORRECT


Sometimes, things they don't want to let others know, such as marital quarrels, happen, and I have to mediate.
>> Sometimes, things like marital quarrels, which they don't want to let others know, happen, and I have to mediate.


The important thing in that case is not to communicate their actions to others.
>> CORRECT


We have to be another family figure.
>> We have to be like another family figure.


We don't talk about family shaming to others and make them go through trouble.
>> CORRECT


Giving their needs, such as giving my time and sometimes helping with materials or introducing friends for human relationships, is only possible with a family's heart.
>> Meeting their needs, such as giving my time, helping with materials, or introducing friends for human relationships, is only possible with a family's heart.


If we treat each other like family in this way, the bond will be stronger.
>> CORRECT

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