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Q: What is more important to take care of: mental health or physical health?
A: I think mental health would be more important to take care of.
If one don't take care of physical health much, he would feel sick and maybe get hurt easily, but it is temporary.
But if one don't take care of mental health, the misery would remain for a long time.

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Hello, Paul!
I understand your point. Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
~ Teacher Trixia

CONTENT:
I think mental health would be more important to take care of.
- I think mental health is more important to take care of. 
If one don't take care of physical health much, he would feel sick and maybe get hurt easily, but it is temporary.
- If someone doesn't take care of their physical health, they might feel sick or get injured easily, but that is usually temporary. 
But if one don't take care of mental health, the misery would remain for a long time.
- However, if someone neglects their mental health, the distress can last much longer.
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