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New activities I want to try in Jeju Island

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First, I want to see camellia in Jeju Island. One of my friends who has traveled Jeju Island in winter recommend some places in which camellia would be in full bloom. I really expected it!

Second, My friend and I planned to 'Kidult tour' in Jeju Island.
We will visited museum in which theme is Moomin, which is a character looks like hippo.
And we bought the ticket to visit 'Snoopy Land'!
It will be interesting for me because this tour program is different with previous tour programs-enjoy the scenery of Jeju Island-.

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Good evening once again, Min!

Since you have all the places and destination figured out, I guess there will never be a dull moment in Jeju Island with your friend. All you have to do is to manage your time well and enjoy all the sceneries that Jeju Island could offer this winter season. 

This time, you will discover the different features of the island that you have never seen before. Take a lot of photos and create only remarkable memories.

As you can see below, there are grammar suggestions to some of your sentences. Read and analyze them closely.

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First, I want to see camellia in Jeju Island. One of my friends who has traveled Jeju Island in winter recommend some places in which camellia would be in full bloom. I really expected it!
>> Correct! Very good sentences!
Or: ...I really expect it.

Second, My friend and I planned to 'Kidult tour' in Jeju Island.
>> Second, my friend and I planned to go to 'Kidult tour' in Jeju Island.

We will visited museum in which theme is Moomin, which is a character looks like hippo.
>> We will visit the museum in which the theme is Moomin, which is a character that looks like a hippo.

And we bought the ticket to visit 'Snoopy Land'!
>> Correct!

It will be interesting for me because this tour program is different with previous tour programs-enjoy the scenery of Jeju Island-.
>> It will be interesting for me because this tour program is different with previous tour programs-enjoying the scenery of Jeju Island-.
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