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I will be discouraged when I can\'t ask help to my family or friends!

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Oh my goodness! This situation is terrible to me because I prefer to find solutions with asking my family or friends!
But If I have a problem in the office, I can ask my colleagues for help
Our team members do same tasks-investigating income and assets of people who wants to benefit social welfare service-, so we ask for help each other.

Sometimes, I get an advice of my private issues.
Actually I have been on medication for depression since last year.
When I was considering whether to visit the psychiatric clinic or not, I asked a colleague for advice.

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Hi, Min!

Asking for help is very brave. However, by so doing, we need to seek the help of people who are insightful and experts regarding our existing problem. We have to pay attention and finally decide for ourselves what the next best step to take.

The choices that we make shape our lives. Thus, we have to be cautious in taking big leaps. Listening to other people's advice may be beneficial, yet our own critical ability to choose matters more.

You have many good sentences below. Always use appropriate prepositions to connect your ideas in your sentences. Well done!

See you.

-T. Donna~

Oh my goodness! This situation is terrible to me because I prefer to find solutions with asking my family or friends!
>> Oh my goodness! This situation is terrible to me because I prefer to find solutions by asking my family or friends!

But If I have a problem in the office, I can ask my colleagues for help.
>> Correct!

Our team members do same tasks-investigating income and assets of people who wants to benefit social welfare service-, so we ask for help each other.
>> Our team members do the same tasks-investigating income and assets of people who want to benefit from the social welfare service-, so we ask for help from each other.

Sometimes, I get an advice of my private issues.
>> Sometimes, I get an advice for my private issues.

Actually I have been on medication for depression since last year.
>> Correct!

When I was considering whether to visit the psychiatric clinic or not, I asked a colleague for advice.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
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