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1. The weather in Dubai is too hot, but it is not hot because there is little moisture. It is fine weather if you sit in the shade.
2. It is not hot at night in Africa. Especially in high mountainous areas, people should wear thick coats.
3. It's so cold at night that there should be a firewood fire.
4. People think that the weather in Africa will be hot even at night, but it different from each regions
5. Most people of Africa are friendly and pure, but they lack much to eat and wear. few Africans is the rich. In particular, there are many Indians and Chinese people living in Africa
6. They had hired Africans that they to clean and cook rice for indians and chines.
7. Few rich people also have private swimming pool in their house.

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Hello, Ms. Grace! Thank you for sharing all this information about Africa and Dubai. Happy weekend!
-T. Sonny
The weather in Dubai is too hot, but it is not hot because there is little moisture. 
>>The weather in Dubai is too hot, but it is not dry because there is little moisture. 
It is fine weather if you sit in the shade.
>>You¡¯ll be fine as long as you're in the shade.
It is not hot at night in Africa.
>>Nights are not hot in Africa.
Especially in high mountainous areas, people should wear thick coats.
>>Correct!
It's so cold at night that there should be a firewood fire.
>>The nighttime temperatures are so low, we need a fire to stay warm.
People think that the weather in Africa will be hot even at night, but it different from each regions
>>People think the weather in Africa will be hot even at night, but it's different for each region.
Most people of Africa are friendly and pure, but they lack much to eat and wear. 
>>Most Africans are friendly and pure but there's a scarcity in food and clothes.
few Africans is the rich. 
>>Only a few Africans are wealthy.
particular, there are many Indians and Chinese people living in Africa
>>In particular, Africa is home to many Indians and Chinese people.
They had hired Africans that they to clean and cook rice for indians and chines.
>>Africans were hired to clean and cook for the Indian and Chinese communities.
Few rich people also have private swimming pool in their house.
>>A few rich people also have private swimming pools in their houses.

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