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Is there an advertisement that made an impression on you when you were a child?
Yes, I remember an animated commercial for a candy brand when I was a child. Its cachy jingle and colorful visuals left a lasting impression on me.

What do you do when you feel bored?
When would you feel bored?
Do you often feel bored?
I don¡¯t feel bored often, but it usually happens when I have nothing productive to do. When I¡¯m bored, I like to read a book, watch a movie, or go for a walk to refresh my mind.

Do you think childhood is boring or adulthood is boring?
I think both can be boring at times, but adulthood feels more monotonous due to responsibilities. Childhood was more fun because everything felt new and exciting.


Would you invite friends to your home?
Where do you often meet each other?
Yes, I often invite close friends to my home for meals or to watch movies. Sometimes, we meet at cafes or parks to spend time together.

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Good day to you YOUNG IN!  I appreciate your effort of being diligent every day especially learning the language enthusiastically. Keep yourself focused and soon enough you'll hit your target! Have a great weekend~!^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Is there an advertisement that made an impression on you when you were a child?

Yes, I remember an animated commercial for a candy brand when I was a child. Its cachy jingle and colorful visuals left a lasting impression on me.
>>>Yes, I remember an animated commercial for a candy brand from my childhood. Its catchy jingle and colorful visuals left a lasting impression on me.

What do you do when you feel bored?
When would you feel bored?
Do you often feel bored?

I don¡¯t feel bored often, but it usually happens when I have nothing productive to do. When I¡¯m bored, I like to read a book, watch a movie, or go for a walk to refresh my mind.
>>>I don't get bored often, but it usually happens when I have nothing productive to do. When I do feel bored, I like to read a book, watch a movie, or go for a walk to clear my mind.

Do you think childhood is boring or adulthood is boring?

I think both can be boring at times, but adulthood feels more monotonous due to responsibilities. Childhood was more fun because everything felt new and exciting.
>>>I think both can be boring at times, but adulthood feels more monotonous because of responsibilities. Childhood was more fun because everything felt new and exciting.

Would you invite friends to your home?
Where do you often meet each other?

Yes, I often invite close friends to my home for meals or to watch movies. Sometimes, we meet at cafes or parks to spend time together.
>>> Yes, I often invite close friends over for meals or to watch movies. Sometimes, we meet at cafes or parks to hang out.
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