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What is your new year resolution for 2025?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-01-04 1625

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I have three main New Year's resolution for 2025.
First, adapting to a new job and task.
That's the most important resolution for 2025.
Actually, I'm a new employee who just joined my new job.
So, I want to adapt smoothly and well to my new job. And I want to learn my task well from my seniors and show them how to handle my task well without their help. Maybe I should spend a lot of time.
Second, I'm constantly exercising.
I was swimming every day unitl I got into my new job. But I had no choice but to quit swimming when I got into a new job.
I will make an effort to continue exercising to improve my physical strength and lose weight. Ultimately, I want to make a healthy person and life.
Thired, it is to pass the practical test of the license that has passed the written test and obtain the license.
I want to keep trying and pass the practical test because the validity of my written grades is just around the corner.
Furthermore, I get a license related to task as much as possible.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Yun! 

Thank you for your effort in writing this essay! You’ve done a great job organizing your thoughts and expressing your goals for the New Year. I can see that you’ve put a lot of thought into your resolutions, and I admire your determination to improve in your new job, maintain your health, and achieve your goals for obtaining a license.

You can do these ones! ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


I have three main New Year's resolution for 2025.
>> I have three main New Year's resolutions for 2025.

First, adapting to a new job and task.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The first one is to adapt to my new job and tasks.

That's the most important resolution for 2025.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: This is my top priority for 2025.

Actually, I'm a new employee who just joined my new job.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I recently started my new job as a fresh employee.

So, I want to adapt smoothly and well to my new job. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I want to adapt smoothly and effectively to my new job.

And I want to learn my task well from my seniors and show them how to handle my task well without their help. 
>> I want to learn my responsibilities from my seniors and eventually handle my tasks independently.

Maybe I should spend a lot of time.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I might need to invest a lot of time.

Second, I'm constantly exercising.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The second one is to constantly exercise. 

I was swimming every day unitl I got into my new job.
>> I was swimming every day until I got into my new job.. 

But I had no choice but to quit swimming when I got into a new job.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Unfortunately, I had to stop swimming when I began working.

I will make an effort to continue exercising to improve my physical strength and lose weight.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I’ll strive to keep exercising to build strength and lose weight.

Ultimately, I want to make a healthy person and life.
>> Ultimately, I want to become a healthier person and live a better life.

Thired, it is to pass the practical test of the license that has passed the written test and obtain the license.
>> Third, I want to pass the practical test and obtain the license since I’ve already passed the written exam.

I want to keep trying and pass the practical test because the validity of my written grades is just around the corner.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I’ll keep trying to pass the practical test because my written grades are about to expire.

Furthermore, I get a license related to task as much as possible.
>> Furthermore, I aim to acquire as many task-related licenses as possible.
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