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Do you think anyone in your family has the same talent?
Do you think your talent can be useful for your future work? Why?
à My mother also plays the piano, and we sometimes perform together. My talent may not directly relate to my job, but it helps me relax and stay creative.

Was it mastered recently or when you were young?
Do you have a talent or something you are good at?
à I¡¯m good at playing the piano, a skill I learned when I was a child. Practicing regularly helped me improve over the years.

Do you think it is important to wear a watch? Why?
Do you wear a watch?
à Yes, I wear a watch because it¡¯s convenient for checking the time without using my phone. It also adds a professional touch to my outfit.

Why do some people wear expensive watches?
Have you ever got a watch as a gift?
à Some people wear expensive watches as a status symbol or for their quality. I received a watch as a graduation gift, and it¡¯s very special to me.

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Hi, Young In! Here are the improved versions of your responses to the questions you chose for your homework.
~T. Jenna

Do you think anyone in your family has the same talent?
Do you think your talent can be useful for your future work? Why?
My mother also plays the piano, and we sometimes perform together. My talent may not directly relate to my job, but it helps me relax and stay creative.

Do you think anyone in your family has the same talent?
>>Yes, my mother also plays the piano, so we share the same talent. We sometimes perform together, and it¡¯s always a great experience. I¡¯ve learned a lot from her, and it's nice to have a common interest we can enjoy together.

Do you think your talent can be useful for your future work? Why?
My mother also plays the piano, and we sometimes perform together. My talent may not directly relate to my job, but it helps me relax and stay creative.
>>My talent may not directly relate to my future job, but I do think it can be useful in other ways. For example, I'm good at playing the piano, and doing so helps me relax and de-stress, which is important for maintaining a healthy work-life balance. Additionally, playing the piano keeps my mind creative, which could be beneficial for problem-solving and thinking outside the box in my future career.

Do you have a talent or something you are good at? Was it mastered recently or when you were young?
I¡¯m good at playing the piano, a skill I learned when I was a child. Practicing regularly helped me improve over the years.
>>I have a strong aptitude for playing the piano. I started learning when I was a child, and it¡¯s something I¡¯ve been passionate about for many years. Through regular practice, I¡¯ve gradually improved my skills, and I still enjoy playing today. It¡¯s not something I mastered recently, but rather developed over time with consistent effort.

Do you wear a watch?
 Yes, I wear a watch because it¡¯s convenient for checking the time without using my phone. It also adds a professional touch to my outfit.
>>Yes, I do. I find it really convenient for checking the time without having to pull out my phone. Additionally, wearing a watch gives my outfit a more polished and professional look.

Do you think it is important to wear a watch? Why?
>>Absolutely! I think it is necessary to wear a watch. For one, it¡¯s very practical as it allows us to check the time quickly without having to pull out our phone. This can be especially useful in situations where we want to stay discreet or when we're busy. Moreover, wearing a watch gives our outfit a more polished and professional look.

Why do some people wear expensive watches?
Some people wear expensive watches as a status symbol or for their quality. 
>>Some people wear high-end watches as a way to signal their status or wealth. These watches are often seen as a symbol of success and can make a statement about one's social standing. Additionally, many luxury watches are valued for their exceptional quality and craftsmanship, which makes them more desirable.

Have you ever got a watch as a gift?
I received a watch as a graduation gift, and it¡¯s very special to me.
>>Yes, I received a watch as a graduation present, and it holds a lot of sentimental value to me. It¡¯s not just a practical accessory, but it also serves as a meaningful reminder of a significant achievement in my life.
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