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Will you buy a new one in the future?
What was your first mobile phone?
à My first mobile phone was a simple flip phone, and I was very excited to have it. I plan to buy a new phone in the future if my current one gets outdated.

Do you like being busy?
When do you find it hard to allocate time?
à I like being busy as it keeps me productive, but it¡¯s hard to manage time when I have multiple deadlines. Proper planning helps me stay organized.

Is it easy to manage time for you?
How do you plan your time in a day?
à Managing time is challenging but doable with a schedule. I plan my day by listing priorities and setting specific times for tasks.

Who do you like to watch sports games with?
Do you like to watch live sports games?
à Yes, I enjoy watching live sports games because they are exciting and energetic. I prefer watching them with friends or family for a fun experience.

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Will you buy a new one in the future?
What was your first mobile phone?
My first mobile phone was a simple flip phone, and I was very excited to have it. I plan to buy a new phone in the future if my current one gets outdated.
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My first mobile phone was a basic flip phone, and I was really excited to own it. It was a big deal for me at the time. I plan to buy a new phone in the future if my current one becomes outdated, as technology keeps evolving quickly.

Do you like being busy?
When do you find it hard to allocate time?
I like being busy as it keeps me productive, but it¡¯s hard to manage time when I have multiple deadlines. Proper planning helps me stay organized.
>>I enjoy staying busy because it helps me remain productive, but managing my time can be challenging when I have multiple deadlines. However, proper planning plays a crucial role in keeping me organized and ensuring I stay on top of my tasks.

Is it easy to manage time for you?
How do you plan your time in a day?
Managing time is challenging but doable with a schedule. I plan my day by listing priorities and setting specific times for tasks.
>>Managing time can be challenging, but it's definitely achievable with a proper schedule. I plan my day by making a list of priorities and assigning specific times for each task, which helps me stay focused and organized.

Who do you like to watch sports games with?
Do you like to watch live sports games?
Yes, I enjoy watching live sports games because they are exciting and energetic. I prefer watching them with friends or family for a fun experience.
>>Yes, I'm keen on watching live sports games because they¡¯re exciting and full of energy. I prefer watching them with friends or family as it makes the experience more enjoyable and creates a lively atmosphere.
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