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Do you like the morning or evening?
What do you usually do in the evening?
à I prefer the evening because it¡¯s a time to relax after a busy day. In the evening, I usually read, watch TV, or spend time with my family.

What did you do in the evening when you were little? Why?
Are there any differences between what you do in the evening now and what you did in the past?
à When I was little, I spent my evenings playing with friends or doing homework because I had fewer responsibilities. Now, my evenings are more focused on unwinding and preparing for the next day.

Do you spend your evenings doing the same things on both weekends and weekdays? Why?
à Not really. On weekdays, I focus on work or study in the evening, but on weekends, I try to relax and spend more time with friends or family. It helps me maintain a good balance.

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Hi, Young In! Please check the following.
~T. Jenna

Do you like the morning or evening?
What do you usually do in the evening?
I prefer the evening because it¡¯s a time to relax after a busy day. In the evening, I usually read, watch TV, or spend time with my family.
>>I generally prefer the evening over the morning because it offers a chance to unwind and de-stress after a hectic day. In the evening, I typically engage in relaxing activities such as reading, watching TV, or enjoying quality time with my family. This routine helps me recharge and prepare for the next day.

What did you do in the evening when you were little? Why?
Are there any differences between what you do in the evening now and what you did in the past?
When I was little, I spent my evenings playing with friends or doing homework because I had fewer responsibilities. Now, my evenings are more focused on unwinding and preparing for the next day.
>>When I was a kid, my evenings were often spent playing with friends or completing homework, as I had fewer responsibilities at the time. It was a more carefree period, and I enjoyed those moments of relaxation and play. However, as I've grown older, my evenings have become more focused on unwinding after a busy day.  I also spend some time in the evening getting ready for the next day, which is a big change from the carefree evenings I enjoyed as a child.

Do you spend your evenings doing the same things on both weekends and weekdays? Why?
Not really. On weekdays, I focus on work or study in the evening, but on weekends, I try to relax and spend more time with friends or family. It helps me maintain a good balance.
>>Not exactly. During the weekdays, my evenings are primarily dedicated to work or studying, which helps me stay productive. However, on weekends, I make an effort to unwind and spend more time with friends or family. This variation in my evening routine helps me maintain a healthy balance between work, study and personal life.
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