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The smartphone changed our life. we don't go to bank, post office and cafe for face to face meeting. we communicate to another country thought the phone using app like google meet, zoom, microsoft etc. It is very useful and helpfur in our daily life. so, I am afraid to lost my phone . I can't do anything.

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Good morning again Ms. Ella~!^^ I hope you'll have a good time today. Thank you for doing your essay every time. I know that you are always eager to improve yourself. Always be motivated! Have a good one~
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The smartphone changed our life. 
>>> The smartphone has significantly changed our lives.
we don't go to bank, post office and cafe for face to face meeting.
>>> We no longer need to visit the bank, post office, or cafe for face-to-face meetings.
 we communicate to another country thought the phone using app like google meet, zoom, microsoft etc.
>>>We can easily communicate with people from other countries through apps like Google Meet, Zoom, and Microsoft Teams.
It is very useful and helpfur in our daily life. so, I am afraid to lost my phone .
>>>useful and make our daily lives more convenient.
 I can't do anything.
>>> CORRECT~^^
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