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Is there anything that helps you feel better when you\'re feeling overwhelmed?

작성자: 노*철
2025-01-20 1365

회원님의 영작문

It is impossible to keep my feelings the same all the time.
People's emotions also change according to their external environment.
When I meet environmental changes that overwhelm me, I first analyze the nature of the environment.
Is that an environment that I can change?
Or is it an environment I can't change?
If I can't change the environment now, when will I be able to change it?
Or is it an environment where I can't predict whether I can change it or not?
In my experience, most of the environmental changes that overwhelm me were solved by waiting while doing my work hard.
I tell my two daughters that they must have their own ways of dealing with stress.
Previously, I overcame a difficult situation by reading books.
Now, I overcome difficulties through music.
If I listen to music or play a musical instruments, I can feel free from the environments that overwhelms me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi David! Thank you for sharing your thoughtful response! I really appreciate how you reflected on managing emotions and adapting to environmental changes. Your perspective on analyzing whether an environment can be changed and taking action accordingly is insightful. I also loved how you emphasized finding personal ways to handle stress, such as through reading or music. Sharing these lessons with your daughters is such a meaningful approach, and it’s inspiring to see how you’ve used music as a way to overcome challenges. Your reflections are not only practical but also uplifting!

~ T. Lia 

It is impossible to keep my feelings the same all the time.
>> CORRECT

People's emotions also change according to their external environment.
>> CORRECT

When I meet environmental changes that overwhelm me, I first analyze the nature of the environment.
>> CORRECT

Is that an environment that I can change?
>> CORRECT

Or is it an environment I can't change?
>> CORRECT

If I can't change the environment now, when will I be able to change it?
>> CORRECT

Or is it an environment where I can't predict whether I can change it or not?
>> CORRECT

In my experience, most of the environmental changes that overwhelm me were solved by waiting while doing my work hard.
>> In my experience, most of the environmental changes that overwhelmed me were resolved by waiting while working hard.

I tell my two daughters that they must have their own ways of dealing with stress.
>> CORRECT

Previously, I overcame a difficult situation by reading books.
>> CORRECT

Now, I overcome difficulties through music.
>>CORRECT

If I listen to music or play a musical instruments, I can feel free from the environments that overwhelms me.
>> If I listen to music or play musical instruments, I can feel free from the environments that overwhelm me.

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