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Do you believe in the saying, \"First impression lasts?\" Why or why not?

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I don't believe saying. Because peoples' first impression are not all part.
Spend just five minutes with people and you'll find that's not correct.
The face looks scary, but the personality is not, and the opposite case is true.
Therfore, the first impression is easily broken and you shouldn't believe the first impression directly.
In Korea, however, it is widely said that first impressions last a long time and many people believe it.
They even use the funny expression, "Face appearance is science." When people see criminals, people use these words a lot, but I don't think I should make a story that induces sympathy for criminals, but I don't think I should judge them carelessly.

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Hi! 

Thank you for submitting your essay. 
I like your answer. I agree. It is hard to know or judge someone based on their initial impression alone. 
It's always better to know them a little longer before we can make proper judgement about their personalities. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



I don't believe saying. Because peoples' first impression are not all part.
>> I don't believe in that saying because people's first impressions are not everything. 
>> Or: I don¡¯t believe in first impressions because people's initial judgments aren't always accurate.

Spend just five minutes with people and you'll find that's not correct.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Spend just five minutes with someone, and you'll find that's not the case.

The face looks scary, but the personality is not, and the opposite case is true.
>> A face may look scary, but the personality might not be, and the opposite can also be true.
>> Or: A face may look intimidating, but the personality may not be, and the opposite can be true as well.


Therfore, the first impression is easily broken and you shouldn't believe the first impression directly.
>> Therefore, first impressions can be easily changed, and you shouldn't rely on them too much.
>> Or: Therefore, first impressions are easily broken, and you shouldn¡¯t believe them too quickly.


In Korea, however, it is widely said that first impressions last a long time and many people believe it.
>> CORRECT.

They even use the funny expression, "Face appearance is science." When people see criminals, people use these words a lot, but I don't think I should make a story that induces sympathy for criminals, but I don't think I should judge them carelessly.
>> They even use the humorous expression, "Face appearance is science." When people see criminals, they often use this saying, but I don't think I should create a narrative that induces sympathy for criminals. I also don't think we should judge them carelessly.
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