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What kind of advertising do you like?
Do you like advertisements?
Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?
à I am into creative and engaging advertisements, especially those that tell a compelling story. While I do like some ads, I find that seeing too many on public transport can be a bit overwhelming. The most memorable ones are those that use humor, evoke strong emotions, or have a unique element that captures attention.

5-1. Evening time
Do you like the morning or evening?
What do you usually do in the evening?
à I generally prefer the evening over the morning because it offers a chance to unwind and de-stress after a hectic day. In the evening, I typically engage in relaxing activities such as reading, watching TV, or enjoying quality time with my family. This routine helps me recharge and prepare for the next day.

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Hey there, Young In! Please check if the following works for you ^^ However, a couple of lines won¡¯t be enough to reach 6.5. The score you want requires sufficient elaboration in your answers. The score 6.5 in IELTS speaking typically requires more elaboration than just a couple of lines. While brief answers might be understandable, to score a 6.5, your responses should include more detail, examples, and development of your ideas. You need to show that you can expand on your answers clearly and logically. Simply giving short responses without much explanation would likely limit your score. 
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2. Advertisement
What kind of advertising do you like?
Do you like advertisements?
Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?
à I am into creative and engaging advertisements, especially those that tell a compelling story. While I do like some ads, I find that seeing too many on public transport can be a bit overwhelming. The most memorable ones are those that use humor, evoke strong emotions, or have a unique element that captures attention.
>>I¡¯m into creative, engaging advertisements, especially those with a compelling story. While I enjoy some, I find seeing too many on public transport overwhelming, with the most memorable ones being humorous, emotionally impactful, or uniquely attention-grabbing.

5-1. Evening time
Do you like the morning or evening?
What do you usually do in the evening?
à I generally prefer the evening over the morning because it offers a chance to unwind and de-stress after a hectic day. In the evening, I typically engage in relaxing activities such as reading, watching TV, or enjoying quality time with my family. This routine helps me recharge and prepare for the next day.
>>I generally prefer the evening to the morning as it offers a chance to unwind after a busy day. In the evening, I usually relax by reading, watching TV, or spending time with my family, which helps me recharge for the next day.
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