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Are there any differences between what you do in the evening now and what you did in the past?
à When I was a kid, my evenings were often spent playing with friends or completing homework, as I had fewer responsibilities at the time. It was a more carefree period, and I enjoyed those moments of relaxation and play. However, as I've grown older, my evenings have become more focused on unwinding after a busy day. I also spend some time in the evening getting ready for the next day, which is a big change from the carefree evenings I enjoyed as a child.

Do you spend your evenings doing the same things on both weekends and weekdays? Why?
à Not exactly. During the weekdays, my evenings are primarily dedicated to work or studying, which helps me stay productive. However, on weekends, I make an effort to unwind and spend more time with friends or family. This variation in my evening routine helps me maintain a healthy balance between work, study and personal life.

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Hey there, Young In! Please check if the following works for you ^^ However, a couple of lines won¡¯t be enough to reach 6.5. The score you want requires sufficient elaboration in your answers. The score 6.5 in IELTS speaking typically requires more elaboration than just a couple of lines. While brief answers might be understandable, to score a 6.5, your responses should include more detail, examples, and development of your ideas. You need to show that you can expand on your answers clearly and logically. Simply giving short responses without much explanation would likely limit your score. 
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Are there any differences between what you do in the evening now and what you did in the past?
à When I was a kid, my evenings were often spent playing with friends or completing homework, as I had fewer responsibilities at the time. It was a more carefree period, and I enjoyed those moments of relaxation and play. However, as I've grown older, my evenings have become more focused on unwinding after a busy day. I also spend some time in the evening getting ready for the next day, which is a big change from the carefree evenings I enjoyed as a child.
>>As a child, my evenings were carefree, spent playing with friends or doing homework. Now, they¡¯re more about unwinding and preparing for the next day, which is a big change.

Do you spend your evenings doing the same things on both weekends and weekdays? Why?
à Not exactly. During the weekdays, my evenings are primarily dedicated to work or studying, which helps me stay productive. However, on weekends, I make an effort to unwind and spend more time with friends or family. This variation in my evening routine helps me maintain a healthy balance between work, study and personal life.
>>During weekdays, my evenings are focused on work or studying to stay productive. On weekends, I unwind and spend time with friends or family, which helps maintain a healthy balance between work, study, and personal life.
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