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What kind of a leader makes a good leader?

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2025-01-23 1436

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Reflecting how chaotic Korean politics has been for the last several weeks, I believe good leaders need to be full of humility. In my perspective humble leaders are more approachable and open-minded. This trait allows leaders to be good communicators who are open to the ideas of others. Eventually, these leaders would be better in handling conflict by finding common ground and compromise. I believe ousted South Korean president lacks this quality which he was notorious from the time as Attorney General. His arrogance and stubbornness led him to ignore sincere advice from professionals and left out with only radical loyalists. For instance, during the hearing, most of Minister of States testified that they had disagreed with martial law. However, president pushed agenda because he was captivated with the thought of extremist. If president was more open minded to his closest allies and comprisable to opposition party, the Korean might have not gone through chaotic situation.

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Thank you for this Aciel. Yes, humility is indeed an honorable trait.

Reflecting how chaotic Korean politics has been for the last several weeks, I believe good leaders need to be full of humility. 
>>>  Reflecting on how chaotic Korean politics has been for the last several weeks, I believe good leaders need to be full of humility.  
In my perspective humble leaders are more approachable and open-minded. 
>>>  correct 
This trait allows leaders to be good communicators who are open to the ideas of others. 
>>>   correct  
Eventually, these leaders would be better in handling conflict by finding common ground and compromise. 
>>>   Eventually, these leaders would be better in handling conflicts by finding a common ground and compromise. 
I believe ousted South Korean president lacks this quality which he was notorious from the time as Attorney General. 
>>>  I believe ousted South Korean president lacks this quality which he was notorious of from the time as Attorney General.  
His arrogance and stubbornness led him to ignore sincere advice from professionals and left out with only radical loyalists. 
>>>   His arrogance and stubbornness led him to ignore sincere advice from professionals and was left with only radical loyalists. 
For instance, during the hearing, most of Minister of States testified that they had disagreed with martial law. 
>>>   For instance, during the hearing, most of Minister of States testified that they had disagreed with the martial law. 
However, president pushed agenda because he was captivated with the thought of extremist. 
>>>   However, the president pushed through with the agenda because he was captivated with the thought of extremism
If president was more open minded to his closest allies and comprisable to opposition party, the Korean might have not gone through chaotic situation.
>>>   If the president was more open minded to his closest allies and was comprisable to the opposition party, Korea might have not gone through a chaotic situation.
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