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How significant is it for a country to be an ally of a country?

작성자: 문*현
2025-01-23 1736

회원님의 영작문

In my perspective having an ally of a country is having a colleague. However, having allies is having a group to seek advantages collectively. It is why many call allies a strategic relationship. Sometimes allies can be costly because they entail trade deals or contributions. Also, it does not indicate that having allies is free from every risk profile. The former example is UK, and the latter example is Ukraine. Main reason UK withdrew EU is that even though UK pays most of the contribution to the bloc most goes to support the other European nations. It is an example that financial maladies deteriorated relationship. Then there is Ukraine which attacked by their once closest ally in 2014 and 2022 respectively. After the dissolution of Soviet Union, most of ex-Soviet nations formed allies called CIS (Commonwealth of Independent States). Even before Ukraine withdrew from this partnership it got attacked by Russia which is one of the member states. There are no everlasting allies.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Aciel! You're right, being an ally of another country is a strategic relationship. We have to know how to play the game to survive, to prosper and to benefit.

In my perspective having an ally of a country is having a colleague. 
>>>  correct
>>> OR: In my perspective having an ally of a country is like having a colleague. 
However, having allies is having a group to seek advantages collectively. 
>>> correct
It is why many call allies a strategic relationship. 
>>> correct
Sometimes allies can be costly because they entail trade deals or contributions. 
>>> correct
Also, it does not indicate that having allies is free from every risk profile. 
>>> correct
>>> OR: Also, it does not indicate that having allies is being free from every risk profile. 
The former example is UK, and the latter example is Ukraine. 
>>>   correct
Main reason UK withdrew EU is that even though UK pays most of the contribution to the bloc most goes to support the other European nations. 
>>> Main reason UK withdrew from the EU is that even though UK pays most of the contribution, the bloc most goes to support the other European nations. 
It is an example that financial maladies deteriorated relationship. 
>>>  correct
Then there is Ukraine which attacked by their once closest ally in 2014 and 2022 respectively. 
>>> Then there is Ukraine which was attacked by their once closest ally in 2014 and 2022 respectively. 
After the dissolution of Soviet Union, most of ex-Soviet nations formed allies called CIS (Commonwealth of Independent States). 
>>> correct
Even before Ukraine withdrew from this partnership it got attacked by Russia which is one of the member states. 
>>>  correct
There are no everlasting allies.
>>>  correct
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