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Should kids bring their phones to school?

작성자: 손*희
2025-01-23 1417

회원님의 영작문

I think kids should not bring their phones to school.
First, mobile phones can disrupt learning. When students use their phones during class, their focus diminishes, and their learning effectiveness decreases. Research shows that students who use their phones in class tend to have lower academic achievement compared to those who do not. While communication with friends is important, interaction with teachers should take precedence during class time. Therefore, in an environment without phones, students can concentrate better and learn more effectively.
Second, mobile phones can create social conflicts. School is a crucial place for students to develop social skills and form friendships. However, accessing social media or sending messages through phones can lead to bullying or conflicts. In particular, issues like cyberbullying have become more serious with the increased use of mobile phones.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

HI, Hana! I totally agree with your opinion on this topic. I'm strongly against using phones during the class. However, I think students should be allowed to bring their phones at school so parents or guardians can contact them during emergency situations. But the use of it while the class in going on should be prohibited, or at least limited. See you in the class!
-Teacher Anji

I think kids should not bring their phones to school.
>> CORRECT
First, mobile phones can disrupt learning. 
>> CORRECT
students use their phones during class, their focus diminishes, and their learning effectiveness decreases. 
>> When students use their phones during the class, their focus diminishes, and the learning effectiveness decreases.
Research shows that students who use their phones in class tend to have lower academic achievement compared to those who do not. 
>> Research shows that students who use their phones in the class tend to have lower academic achievement compared to those who do not. 
While communication with friends is important, interaction with teachers should take precedence during class time. 
>> CORRECT
Therefore, in an environment without phones, students can concentrate better and learn more effectively.
>> CORRECT
Second, mobile phones can create social conflicts. 
>> CORRECT
School is a crucial place for students to develop social skills and form friendships. 
>> CORRECT
However, accessing social media or sending messages through phones can lead to bullying or conflicts. 
>> CORRECT
In particular, issues like cyberbullying have become more serious with the increased use of mobile phones.
>> CORRECT
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