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                  Is there a difference in the way Koreans celebrate the Korean New Year and the Western New Year?


Yes, because Korean New Year is eat a rice cake soup and ring the bell but Western is enjoy a party for example Greece is Hang onions in the door and Denmark is dive on sofa.
>> Yes, because Koreans celebrate Korean New Year by eating rice cake soup and ringing the bell but Western New Year is celebrated by enjoying parties. For example, in Greece, they hang onions at their doors, and in Denmark, they dive on their sofas.
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