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What kind of workmates do you want to work with? Why?

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Hi Yun, 

Almost perfect! Great job with your essay. I also agree when you mentioned about the type of colleagues you would want to work with. They are truly ideal! ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


Wouldn't a lot of people want to work with a colleague who has a lot of good points or advantages? HAHA, I'm one of the people who wants it.
>> CORRECT.

First, I hope they are colleagues who get along with people.
>> CORRECT.

Wouldn't you have a good personality if you were a good colleague? 
>> CORRECT.

I think that no matter what job you do, there is only a difference in the frequency of meeting people, but you have to meet people and work anyway. 
>> CORRECT.

Also, there may be tasks that need to work together, and when faced with a difficult task, you need to get along with people to ask others for help.
>> Also, there may be tasks that require teamwork, and when faced with a difficult task, you need to get along with others in order to ask for help.

Second, I hope you are a colleague who is willing to do anything.
>> CORRECT.

If it's your first time, you won't be able to work well. 
>> CORRECT.

You don't have to be bad at work. 
>> CORRECT.

You learn to work by making mistake, making mistakes, and getting in trouble.
>> You learn to work by making mistakes, and getting in trouble.

As time goes by, you get used to work and become proficient. But you can't if you don't have the will to do it. Also, people who try to help me will become unwilling to help and will look at me in a bad light. You need to show your own efforts so that other colleagues will want to help me and give me a helping hand first.
>> CORRECT.
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