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I believe that learning in one's native language is more efficient. This is because when people learn something in one's foreign language, they tend to think and understand it by translating it into their native language.

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Hi Ms. Rachel! Great analysis, but remember to avoid generalizations. Adding more nuance to your argument could make it more persuasive. It would be great to see more connections between your points and how they relate to the larger theme of the essay! ^^
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I believe that learning in one's native language is more efficient. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
This is because when people learn something in one's foreign language, they tend to think and understand it by translating it into their native language.
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