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What are the downsides of city life?

I think it is noise and air pollution.
There are many factors in cities that can cause noise, such as cars and factories.
And they pollute the air, too.

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Hello, Jessica!
Thank you for your continuous dedication to learning English. Please check the corrections below tomorrow. :) Have a great weekend! ^^
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I think it is noise and air pollution.
- I think the main downsides of city life are noise and air pollution.
There are many factors in cities that can cause noise, such as cars and factories.
And they pollute the air, too.
- Cities have many sources of noise, such as cars and factories, which also contribute to air pollution.
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