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What is the best benefit for an employee? Why?

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Hi Yun, 

Thank you for submitting your answer. 
I'm glad that the benefits to employees in your country have improved a lot. 
I think these days, those benefits that promote the well-being of employees have the same importance as salaries. 
I hope more and better benefits will be given to employees around the world. ^^

~ Teacher Gina


Well, it seems to depend on the times and the situation and people's thoughts.
>> Well, it seems to depend on the times and the situation and people's thoughts.

At first, many Koreans thought it was the best benefit to be paid a lot of money based on own performance. 
>> At first, many Koreans thought it was the best benefit to be paid a lot of money based on their own performance. 

It reflected the idea that getting a lot of money is a good thing.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: This reflected the belief that earning a substantial income is desirable.

But Korean's thoughts have changed over time.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: However, Koreans' perspectives have shifted over time.

They put more importance on their own time and learning than money.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Greater value is now placed on personal time and growth rather than money.

That's why there are benefits that give long-term working employees good conditions and give them free health check-ups for their health. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: This is why benefits like favorable conditions for long-term employees and free health check-ups are provided.

I think it's a good attempt to be able to take care of employees and prevent mental problems through a change of feeling.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I believe it¡¯s a positive effort to support employees and address mental health issues by improving their well-being.

There are also benefits for families with young children or employees with families in need of care. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Benefits also extend to families with young children or those needing caregiving support.

Examples include providing free commuting time to give them an opportunity to care, providing them with the opportunity to return home immediately when something urgent happens at home, and providing consideration for vacation.
>> Examples include providing free commuting time to give them an opportunity to take care of their family, providing them with the opportunity to return home immediately when something urgent happens at home, and providing consideration for vacation.

In addition, the low birth rate is a problem in Korea, so the benefits on which it is based are also emerging. 
>> In addition, the low birth rate is a problem in Korea, so the benefits on which it is related to are also emerging. 

It also gives hospital opportunities to couples who are considerate of pregnant women and want to have children.
>> It also gives hospital opportunities to couples who are considering to get pregnant or have children.

In the short-term, I think it will make employees more faithful to their company and create opportunities to focus on their work. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I think, in the short term, it will encourage employees to be more dedicated to their company and allow them to focus more on their tasks.

In the long-term, I think it is a good benefit because there may be parts that contribute to society and the country.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Over time, I think it¡¯s a beneficial initiative, potentially supporting societal and national development.
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