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ESSAY: Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it¡¯s bad for them. Why? What are the most effective ways to improve people¡¯s eating habits?

The reason why many people eat food while it is not healthy is because it tastes good. Taste is quite an important factor in one's choices.
Eating food is a desire and a person lives for this.
It is natural that we strive for something good for our health, but we need to improve the quality of taste for more direct efficiency.

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Hi there Lee! Thanks for doing your homework! Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and effectively presents your argument. You¡¯ve shown strong analytical skills and made good connections between ideas. While your essay is well-developed, you could strengthen the clarity of your argument by incorporating more specific examples in the second paragraph. 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The reason why many people eat food while it is not healthy is because it tastes good. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Taste is quite an important factor in one's choices.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Eating food is a desire and a person lives for this.
>>> Eating is a basic desire, and it is something that sustains life.
It is natural that we strive for something good for our health, but we need to improve the quality of taste for more direct efficiency.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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