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Who is the person you respect the most? Why?

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I respect everyone who is doing their job silently in their place.
Because no one knows what they've done, but they still know how difficult it is to keep their place and do what they've done in their place and take responsibility.
Without these individual people, our society might have already collapsed.
If I choose one more person, I will choose my parents.
Parents are working diligently, fulfilling their responsibilities. Above all, it is difficult to balance at home and at work, because I am doing it as if it is nothing. In particular, it is extremely difficult for a mother to raise her children, take care of her family, go to work and earn money, and I think it is great that she has been doing well so far.

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Hi, 

I appreciate you submitting your answer. 
The people you mentioned, especially your parents, are wonderful people. 
I hope that our society will have more of them for a better society and a brighter future. 
Let's aim to be like them. ^^

~ Teacher Gina

I respect everyone who is doing their job silently in their place. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I respect everyone who silently does their job and fulfills their responsibilities

Because no one knows what they've done, but they still know how difficult it is to keep their place and do what they've done in their place and take responsibility.
>> Because even though no one truly knows what they¡¯ve accomplished, they understand how difficult it is to maintain their position and keep doing what they do.

Without these individual people, our society might have already collapsed.
>> Without these individuals, our society might have already collapsed.
>> Or:  Without these people, our society might have already collapsed.

If I choose one more person, I will choose my parents.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: If I were to choose one more person, it would be my parents.

Parents are working diligently, fulfilling their responsibilities. 
>> CORRECT.

Above all, it is difficult to balance at home and at work, because I am doing it as if it is nothing. 
>>  Above all, it is difficult to balance home and work as if it is nothing.

In particular, it is extremely difficult for a mother to raise her children, take care of her family, go to work and earn money, and I think it is great that she has been doing well so far.
>> CORRECT.
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